Nudist Fiction

This is a group dedicated to writing and sharing stories with a nudist theme.

Currently working on a novella about three adults telling how they got involved with nudity. The story has a food theme. Would like feedback on version you like more:

1. Kathy savors the salad, thinking the evening is a threefer: good food, good story, nude man. They have a few more bites and she asks, Did Lynn ask her mom if youre nudists?

2. Kathy savors the salad, thinking the evening is a threefer: yummy food, charming story, ripe naked man. They have a few more bites and she asks, Did Lynn ask her mom if youre nudists?

Thanks!

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Version 1. I don't feel like the sentence needs to be that flowery. It will distract.

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Version 1. I don't feel like the sentence needs to be that flowery. It will distract.
Thanks for your input!

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Version 1.it's catchy

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Thanks. You are the second person to prefer number one.

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Version 1 for me too.

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Thanks. That is three to zero.

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Version 1 is my preference, the second is too suggestive and draws the reader down a path of assuming too much. It is, however, "you're" (the inner editor in me comes out).

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#1. Better use of adjectives.

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Five to zero, makes a statement. Thanks all for your input.

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